Sunday, September 23, 2007

Friday Snippets: Once Upon a Trip to Mexico

Here's the Friday Snippet. So sorry, most humble apologies and all that jazz about it being late. Leave you link! I'll come and see you!

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Under the cover of dark, Dell rode for almost four hours. The fires from the inner city threw her shadow out long on the pavement and to the east and west the sky burned like burnished copper with the the death of St. Louis and Kansas city. She'd slipped past the barricades at midnight, killing the engine and walking the bike, her shotgun within easy reach.

Now, she laid low off the interstate far north of ground zero. As she approached a lower overpass, she slid the bike down into the ditch and flattened herself against the sloping hill near the exit ramp. Two tanks hunched on either side of the bridge like hulking monsters and Dell could hear the low rumble of engines and generators. It was difficult to see through the tinted lenses of the gas mask, but she snaked her way up the incline until she lay within an a few yards of the tank treads. She strained her ears to listen.

"With the power grid down from here to Detroit, they're right to move us south. No lights, no heat - and the radiation's gonna fall out soon. We can't stay here. Jones said he already heard radio chatter. The Guard's tellin' most people to stay put - but the smart ones, they'll come south ahead of the cold."

"The Guard's tellin' most people to stay put - but the smart ones, they'll come south ahead of the cold."

At that moment, Dell heard the wail of high speed aircraft overhead and saw the black silhouette of slender stealth bombers eating the stars as they raged against the sky. Sonic booms bludgeoned the air just a few seconds later and crushed her beneath the roar of sound. When her ears stopped ringing, she lifted her face from the grass and heard the men above her cheering raggedly. They fired their mortars and their guns into the night sky.

Dell slid back down the hill under the flickering barrage and cranked the bike. Keeping the lights dark, she hunkered over the handlebars, rumbling under the deepest shadows of the bridge. She was completely hidden in the open beneath the light and the thunder as the soldiers on the bridge cheered on the Stealths and the bombs sleeping deadly quiet in their metal bellies.

Dell turned off on the side roads, following her memory of the terrain. She would go north, to the little town of Mexico and she would find someone who could tell her what had happened, someone without tanks that crouched on bridges or bombers who brought death on the wind. She never saw the thick rope slung across the road.

It caught her in the chest, bruising her sternum and blasting the air from her lungs. Her grip on the handlebars went nerveless and the bike careened onto its side, screaming in the gravel as it sputtered to a halt. Dell saw sky and earth and sky again and slammed onto her back in the dust. Everything hurt at once and she thought maybe she was dying. Then she felt her fingers twitch and the cold length of Math's shot gun barrel under her left leg. She thumbed back the hammer, when a shadow leaned over her, blotting out the moon.



So say we all.
Bri

7 comments:

qualcosa di bello said...

i was so sucked in...i thought she was free at last. you really caught me by surprise on the turn at the end.

Anonymous said...

GAAAA!!! good cut off point! Must know what's going to happen.

IanT said...

the black silhouette of slender stealth bombers eating the stars

Nicely done...

The whole passage is well put together, and easy to visualise; and the action moves nice and fast. Good cliffhanger.

You might want to think about clarifying where the voice is coming from - inside the tank (muffled/metallic) or from someone standing outside/by the tank? From the guys firing weapons etc. later I'm guessing it's the latter, but thought at first it was the former...

Kait Nolan said...

"and the bombs sleeping deadly quiet in their metal bellies." Oh wow that was great.

Question...given that things are basically anarchy...how is she going to get gas?

Unknown said...

That rocked! Excellent cut off point. I want to know more!

Amy Ruttan said...

Hey I was thinking about your post apocalyptic story and you seriously need to check out Dorchestor's SHOMI line. They are looking for authors who write like that.

Anonymous said...

How did I miss this the first go around? Oh, well, great snippet! I found myself totally stonewalled by the rope--didn't see that one coming! Great cliffhanger!